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This page contains requests for peer review. A request on this page exposes the relevant article to much better scrutiny than it might otherwise receive, without filling featured article candidates with nominations that need work. This page is still for mostly finished articles that need the final checking by peers.

The Path to a Featured Article
  1. Start a new article
  2. Do some research
  3. Write a great article
  4. Check against the featured article criteria
  5. Get creative criticism
  6. Apply for featured article status
  7. Featured articles

One of the goals of this page is to help articles reach featured article status. See Style and How-to Directory for advice on writing great articles. Or look at the discussion of the perfect article and try to reach as close to as many of those ideals as possible.

Articles that clearly have no chance to make it to featured articles (i.e. articles such as 'lists of' that by their nature cannot meet some of the important criteria for featured articles) should not be listed here. Those and other articles needing extensive work, including stubs, should be listed at Wikipedia:Pages needing attention, Wikipedia:Requests for expansion or one of the other resources for expansion shown in the table below.

Contents
1 Instructions

1.1 How to make a request
1.2 How to respond to a request for contribution
1.3 Policy

2 Requests

2.1 Ismail Al-Faruqi
2.2 Music of Nigeria
2.3 Charles Keeping
2.4 Monty Python
2.5 Fuel Cell Bus Club
2.6 Template:Mapit-US-streetscale
2.7 San Jose, California
2.8 Jarmann M1884
2.9 Krag-Petersson
2.10 Cerritos, California
2.11 Eastern Guinean forests
2.12 Geography of Côte d'Ivoire
2.13 Miami Circle
2.14 Menachem Begin vs. Deir Yassin massacre
2.15 Autobiography (album)
2.16 College rowing (United States)
2.17 Our Gang/The Little Rascals
2.18 Sonoluminescence
2.19 Salt Lake City, Utah
2.20 Cissy Patterson
2.21 Racialism
2.22 John Holmes, Albion K. Parris, John Chandler, Peleg Sprague
2.23 punk rock
2.24 No soap radio
2.25 Cremaster muscle
2.26 Force Dynamics
2.27 WikiReader Cryptography × 73
2.28 3D Monster Maze
2.29 Middletown and Cincinnati Railroad
2.30 Cocteau Twins
2.31 Noel Gallagher
2.32 Baculum
2.33 Frequency analysis
2.34 HTLV
2.35 Body piercing materials
2.36 Oscar Wilde
2.37 Alexander Hamilton
2.38 Childhood amnesia
2.39 Deck (ship)
2.40 Jesusland Map
2.41 The Supremes
2.42 Democratic peace theory
2.43 Flounder
2.44 John F. Kennedy assassination
2.45 Standard of proof
2.46 Gbe languages
2.47 Alfa Romeo
2.48 Pet Sematary
2.49 Lesch-Nyhan syndrome
2.50 Grief
2.51 List of molecules in interstellar space

Instructions


Ways to fix a page  
Topic specific guidelines WikiProject - For guidelines on the format of everything from Saints to Mammals
Pages needing content work To-do list - Per page lists of jobs to-do.
Peer review - For pages that are close to Featured Article status
Requests for expansion
Pages needing attention - For pages which need serious attention from someone familiar with their subject
Cleanup - For pages that don't fit above
Inaccurate or POV pages Accuracy dispute
NPOV dispute
Multiple pages on the same subject Duplicate articles - To request that two or more pages be merged together.
One page on multiple subjects Disambiguation - when "articles about two or more different topics have the same natural title".
Articles to be split - one article that should broken up into more because multiple topics are covered.
Dictionary definitions Things to be moved to Wiktionary - To request a page be moved to Wiktionary.
Non-English pages Pages needing translation into English - To request attention to non-English content in the English Wikipedia.
Deletion Deletion policy - To start the process of deleting a page
Copyright problems Copyright problems - For pages which may violate copyright


How to make a request

  • Anyone can request peer review here. When posting your request, include a brief description of the kind of comments/contributions you want, and sections of the article you think need to be reviewed.
  • Please post new requests at the top, with one section per request.
  • Please be ready to help implement some of the suggestions that peer reviewers make for the article. Collaboration to improve an article needs the help of both the reviewers and the person making the listing.
  • Place the {{peerreview}} marking at the top of the article's talk page (not the article itself) to let other editors of the article know that the article is being peer reviewed.

How to respond to a request for contribution

  • Scan the list of requests below, and if one catches your fancy, follow the link to the article and read it. If you think something's wrong with the article; i.e., it's too long, there's no lead section, poor grammar/spelling, factual errors, etc., post a comment in the appropriate section on this page. For examples, see featured article candidates.
  • If the issue is trivial and/or you have the time and knowledge to fix it, it is advised that you make an effort to resolve the issue. If you do so, please make a note of it on the page to keep others informed about the article's progress.


Featured Article Tools

Policy

  • You are invited to move requests older than a month or without dates to Peer review (to be deleted); if you do not see a request you posted some time ago, you may find it there.
  • In order to make peer review a more dynamic and valuable process, if you list a request for peer review and do not respond after a reasonable period such as a week to comments made here by reviewers, then the listing will also be removed.
  • Once an article reaches Featured article status, it will be removed from peer review to make room for other articles. Also consider removing your listing here once you list it as a featured article candidate.

Requests

Ismail Al-Faruqi

Any comments or suggestions towards improving this article is welcome, as I would really like to nominate it for WP:FAC soon. I have been working on this article alone for the past three weeks or so -- check the history panel of the article ;) Menj 02:10, 8 Dec 2004 (UTC)

Music of Nigeria

I'd like to nominate it for WP:FAC soon, but decided to put it here first. I've just spent two hours moving bits around and swapping sections and whatnot, but I'm not sure the result reads any clearer than it did before. I'd like some readers' opinions. Are there any questions unanswered? Can you follow the complex interweaving of juju, fuji, highlife, Yo-pop and other styles? Does it give an adequate overview of traditional music? Tuf-Kat 02:05, Dec 8, 2004 (UTC)

Charles Keeping

I'd like some input to put Keeping's work into context. I don't know enough about artists and illustrators to be able to identify the major influences on his work, or what else was going on in illustration and Keeping's place in it. I also think more opinions would enrich the article. --User:Nicknack009

Monty Python

I stumbled across this page recently and have been adding content to it. I think it has enough content to become a Featured Article at some point, although I also think there is still some work to be done. If you notice any simple problems, such as grammatical errors, easily fixable POV problems, or factual errors, please fix them and post here about it (don't post if it's completely trivial). If you have any other problems with it, such as sections having too little content, too much, not the right content, or there's POV, please post here and give possible solutions if you have any. I believe the content should focus on the cast more than the films or television series, because, unlike Star Trek, Monty Python has come to mean just that: the six people behind the films and TV series. There must be some content-blending with the TV series, however, since that is where "Monty Python" comes from. --brian0918 talk 02:26, 5 Dec 2004 (UTC)

Fuel Cell Bus Club

I think I am the only person to have contributed to this article so far. I know it needs to have a reference to the United Nations and perhaps when the buses started operating in Europe if we can find that out. Brianjd 05:55, 2004 Nov 30 (UTC)

  • Another user has also contributed. Brianjd 07:36, 2004 Dec 4 (UTC)

Template:Mapit-US-streetscale

This is a prototype for some external mapping link templates that I think could be pretty useful. You can see an example of this template in action at: Buena Vista Park. Please give me some feedback as to whether you think this could be useful and how to make it more useful. You will find my idea for the template discussed on the talk page. Thanks! --Chinasaur 04:09, 30 Nov 2004 (UTC)

San Jose, California

This article has been greatly expanded in the last 18 months or so. While we know it's not perfect yet (if any article can truly be perfect), we'd like to nominate it for featured article status. A few more eyes looking at the article before that happens would help ensure its accecptance. Gentgeen 02:30, 30 Nov 2004 (UTC)

  • Looks good. I made a few minor changes, but nothing drastic. Regarding the history, I'm wondering how San Jose came to be such a great place for high-tech companies - were there tax incentives or people just came for the view or what? It's one of the most important technological hubs in the U.S. - how did it get that way? Other than that, I'm not sure the article flows very well (but organizing a city page like this is tough), and in a few places the text doesn't read particularly well. But overall, looks like a winner that needs a bit more preparation. Spangineer 15:27, Dec 2, 2004 (UTC)
    • One more thing - do you have any print references? It seems to me that "references" generally refer to printed material, while "external links" refer to website references. If my understanding is correct, that means that you have 4 external links and no references, which the featured article critics aren't going to like. It might help to find a couple books on San Jose history that confirm the information you have and include those. One of them could be the book that is excerpted from in the Flashback link. Spangineer 15:40, Dec 2, 2004 (UTC)
      • Online references are acceptable, but should be formatted as shown at Wikipedia:Cite sources. Many people feel that online references are not as reliable, but that varies just like in print references. The goal is to get some of the most reliable references available, and enough to cover and verify all of the material in the article. Usually that would involve some print references, so I second that request. I quick trip to the local library should yield some good ones. - Taxman 22:24, Dec 6, 2004 (UTC)
      • Separate comments I noticed are the map, the larger inset map is very confusing at first as to what it is. Can you get some arrows showing the zoom in or something? Also, many one and two sentence paragraphs throughout the article. Those show bad form, and highlight concepts that either need expanding or merging in with other paragraphs. - Taxman

Jarmann M1884

Pretty much wrote all of this article muyself as well - same as the Krag-Petersson below - and this too is in need of some fresh eyes to bring it up a notch or two. And as with the KP, this could also need attention from someone patient enought to correct my terrible spelling ;) WegianWarrior 14:06, 29 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Krag-Petersson

Pretty much wrote all of this article myself, but it's in need for some fresh eyes to bring it up a notch or two. Could espesially need attention from someone patient enought to correct all my spelling mistakes ;) WegianWarrior 12:50, 29 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Not too many spelling mistakes, I fixed the ones there were. If you use Firefox, you may be interested in the Spellbound extension. It allows spell checking in text input boxes like Wikipedia's. My biggest question is what is a breachblock? There are a number of other terms that could stand wikifying. The gun specific stuff could stand with at least creating stubs for them. Some of them should be explained better in the page. Someone not all that familiar with guns should be able to know what the basic terms are. - Taxman 21:39, Dec 6, 2004 (UTC)
Figured the easiest way to explain what a breachblock is was to create a stub on it ;)
As a gun-nut myself, I find it a bit hard to know what parts should be wikified and have stubs written for them - so any help from anyone who isn't a gun-nut would be helpfull... I'll try to make sure there are no red links in the article if someone just wikifi any terms they don't understand :) WegianWarrior 09:24, 7 Dec 2004 (UTC)
Just think of any of the terms that you know that a non gun person would not. All of those need to be understandable from the context, and many should have articles of their own. But here's a go at some more that need inline explanations of what they are, and or a stub article.
  • mechanism
  • actuation
  • chambered
  • linjers - at least make it more clear that is the name for the ammo
  • breachblock - should also be explained inline. For ex. "...operate the breachblock, which is..."
  • cartridge
  • block
Great material though. Can you get a picture of one to add to the article? A picture of the rifle and/or a diagram of it with all of the parts labeled would be ideal. A diagram could be created by someone skilled in a diagram creation program. - Taxman 17:31, Dec 7, 2004 (UTC)
Tried to make it a bit more easy to understand for a layman. A diagram is going to be harder.. must wait until I'm home from work at any rate ;) WegianWarrior 09:50, 8 Dec 2004 (UTC)

Cerritos, California

Some of this article has been borrowed from the city's website of its history section. Some of it contains a local's perspective on some of the changes in history... It looks okay, overall, but some revisions and edits making sure it's okay would be nice. Kind of like a large stub, kind of not... --AllyUnion (talk) 07:13, 27 Nov 2004 (UTC)

  • The landmarks section is huge, and questionably encyclopedic. Much of the information towards the bottom is Rambot data, with little or no changes made to it. It's a decent start, but it'd be wise to take heed from the Salt Lake City article below, as well as Sarajevo (a current FA, and by far the best city article we have) - those articles are a good guide to work from. Ambi 07:36, 27 Nov 2004 (UTC)
    • The only landmarks that could really be considered encyclopedic is the city's library, the Auto Square and the Pat Nixon Senior Center. Locally around California, the Auto Square is widely known. I have seen many cars sold from this particular auto square around Southern California. The city's library, has some reference to another encyclopedic library, plus it has a Smithsonian Affliation. But in all consideration, Cerritos is a small urban city, nothing at all the size of Salt Lake City. In relative comparison, there is less to focus and detail about. It's just my feelings is that it is nice to get to know people's hometowns and detail out information you wouldn't see in a typical encyclopedia. After all, as the saying goes here, "Wiki is not paper." --AllyUnion (talk) 06:00, 28 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Eastern Guinean forests

Decent-sized stub. Comments and suggestions? Neutrality/talk 00:20, Nov 27, 2004 (UTC)

Geography of Côte d'Ivoire

Most of these Geography of... articles are pure CIA data dumps, so I tried to make one a decent article. Questions, suggestions, and comments welcome! Neutrality/talk 23:47, Nov 26, 2004 (UTC)

Really good job, Neutrality! I found a couple nits, but they seem really minor -
  • "500m altitude" - should this be elevation?
  • This sentence should probably be recast slightly:
    The southeastern region of Côte d'Ivoire is marked by coastal inland lagoons that starts at the Ghanaian border and stretch 300km (190 miles) along the eastern half of the coast.
  • Lateritic and montane are excellent terms, but I had to look up the former... just wondering if this level of precision is relevant?
  • "party to:" It would really be great if these were linked to the relevant treaties (but how the heck you could find them I have no clue.)
I have never seen a better upgrade of these CIA data dumps. Thanks! - Amgine 03:06, 27 Nov 2004 (UTC)
Good start, Neutrality. It'd be nice to see the last of the CIA dumped material put into prose form, which shouldn't be too hard. However, the best suggestion I can make is to take a look at Geography of Ireland, and copy its format. The Irish article is amazing, and sets up a layout that could be used for practically any country. Ambi 03:31, 27 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Miami Circle

After re-reading what I wrote, I have changed this summary. I am new to Wikipedia, and this is the first article that I have written that I consider close to 'complete'. I am pleased with the content, but I would appreciate feedback on all levels, from style and POV to content. I know that it needs wikification and no doubt some grammatical cleanup, which I will carry out myself following a sufficient break from the text. I know that the "Sceptic cranks and septic tanks" title is inappropriate, but it amused me to write though it's a bit POV ;-) I wrote this as I was rather surprised to find it wasn't mentioned at all in the Wikipedia, it is certainly a candidate for the most significant US archaeological find in recent times, though seems overlooked. Particular aspects I would like reviewed are content (anyone who is more familiar with archaeology would certainly be able to help with some of the technical aspects), and I have also had problems finding public domain images (I will be approaching the Miami Historic Preservation council if none can be found). The final comments I would appreciate are anything pertaining to a better approach I could have made to this article as a new Wikipedian. Thanks for any help, in any capacity. Pseudosocrates 19:23, 26 Nov 2004 (UTC)

  • The section title was amusing, but yes, does need to be changed for NPOV. 1) I would certainly contact that association anyway and see if you can't get some GFDL or acceptable Creative Commons licensed pictures from them. They may have other material you can add. 2) The lead section contains a sentence that I don't think it means what you think it means: "It is the only known evidence of a permanent structure cut into the bedrock in the United States..". You must mean before European settlement right? I'm sure there are lots of things permanently cut into the bedrock now. 3) As to general approach, you've done a great job, there are only two things I would suggest: one is a greater reliance on primary sources, and citing them. Did you really get all of that info from 2 online resources? Try to get a hold of primary sources and properly format the ones you do use in a references section. The BBC documentary seems like a good start. Second would be to be careful for the structural POV. Your statements are generally all pretty good, but the article seems to offer criticisms and other viewpoints, only to refute every one of them. If they are really minority viewpoints, simply state that and find a good source and cite it. So basically, great work. Just do more of what you've done and Wikipedia will be a better place. - Taxman 13:31, Dec 2, 2004 (UTC)

Menachem Begin vs. Deir Yassin massacre

I swore not to get involved with Israel / Palestine issues, but these two articles completely disagree over (what should be, with 50 years hindsight) fairly incontrovertible fact (if not uncontroversial). Were Irgun and Stern responsible for the Deir Yassin massacre? -- GWO 13:10, 26 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Autobiography (album)

I need comments on whether the sections are unduly large. --Hemanshu 11:07, 26 Nov 2004 (UTC)

  • I don't think they're unduly large - I think it's more the writing style and neutrality, rather than any length issues. Ambi 03:32, 27 Nov 2004 (UTC)
  • Now that the issues regarding neutrality and writing style have been dealt with, at least to an extent (or so I think, anyway), I've renominated this article for featured status. Possibly the GMA quote in the second paragraph should be replaced with something, but frankly I've been driven to distraction by harassment in the last two days or so and I haven't felt like doing the research to find a suitable replacement. Hopefully I'll find a way to improve that paragraph, though. Everyking 14:21, 27 Nov 2004 (UTC)
    • If the article's not as best as you think you can make it, why renominate it? You seem to be very hurried — would it hurt to wait a day longer? As I've pointed out to you on your talk page, cooling down is a better investment of your time then continuing to stress yourself out. If you know the article could easily be improved further but can't do it now, why nominate it? Johnleemk | Talk 17:11, 27 Nov 2004 (UTC)
      • Yes, it appears the disagreement regarding the article was much deeper than I thought. Fortunately, I've now proposed yet another compromise on talk that will hopefully be acceptable to everyone, and we can work from there. Everyking 04:50, 28 Nov 2004 (UTC)
  • Responding to the original request, yes I think that this article is unecessarily long. There is far too much detail on the chart position and sales that could easily be summarised, we absolutely don't need to know that the album rose from No. 19 to No 16 in its 12th week on the chart for example. (An unrelated issue is that the whole chart position thing is US-centric - what about the rest of the world?). It is also not necessary to list in detail every single TV show that she was on to promote the album, none of these appearance were 'notable'. The Beatles or Elvis Presly's first US TV appearances, or Janet Jackson's breast popping out on TV, that's notable, not that she sat down and brief chat with the show's host. I think that the entire Promotion section should deleted as not necessary, and also, are you going to keep updating this? It will end up 32K in itself, with all the christmas specials and future singles from the LP. I could go on and on, but I hope that sanity and concensus prevails. - Drstuey 05:41, 28 Nov 2004 (UTC)
    • Yes, of course I'll keep working on it if they don't drive me away first, and if they'll actually let me edit the article, which at this point I frankly doubt that they will. The notion that a TV appearance watched by millions isn't notable is so preposterous that I have no response to it. Everyking 05:55, 28 Nov 2004 (UTC)
      • I look forward to the daily guest lists from The Late Show with David Letterman and The Big Breakfast. The notion that a TV appearance watched by millions is a priori notable is preposterous --Calton 09:25, 30 Nov 2004 (UTC)
  • Actually, another thought, since you, Everyking, are obviously such an enthusiastic wiki-ist why don't you set up an Ashley Simpson fan wiki somewhere where you can make the pages as big as you want and spilt them off as much as you want and include anything you want without people trying to edit you. There are plenty of free wiki hosting sites out there for example Seedwiki You can easily transwiki the content over to there. cheers - Drstuey 05:48, 28 Nov 2004 (UTC)
    • Because this isn't just some fun personal project of mine; it's providing information to the people, and that has to be done through Wikipedia. Although I suppose I should expect you'd want to get rid of me, seems everyone else does at this point. Everyking 05:55, 28 Nov 2004 (UTC)
      • it's providing information to the people, and that has to be done through Wikipedia. Well, no, it doesn't. --Calton 09:25, 30 Nov 2004 (UTC)
  • I want to thank Calton for being willing to contribute his thoughts. For my part, I think the lists he describes above would be an excellent resource, and I have a history of opposing the existence of trivial lists. Everyking 10:07, 30 Nov 2004 (UTC)
    • And I'd like to thank Everyking for his willingness to embrace any position, however absurd, that allows him to justify his particular obsession. Or is it merely lip-service? Tell you what, Everyking, why don't you get started on those lists right now? I'll help here:
      • List of Guests on The Late Show with David Letterman
      • List of Guests on The Tonight Show with Jay Leno
      • List of Guests on The Big Breakfast
      • List of Guests on The Today Show
      • List of Guests on Good Morning America
      • List of Guests on BBC Breakfast
      • List of Guests on The Daily Show with Jon Stewart
      • List of Guests on QVC
Just click, and fill in the rest. Easy to do, if you have satellite/cable TV, no? --Calton 08:27, 8 Dec 2004 (UTC)

College rowing (United States)

I wrote the whole article myself and I think it is pretty decent. However I know Rowing isn't a very popular sport in the US, so I am wondering what makes sense and what doesn't. Any way you can help to improve the article would be appreciated. --Alex Krupp 04:31, Nov 26, 2004 (UTC)

  • It's a good start, but there's quite a few things that could do with some work. a) the lead section could be longer, and could summarise the article more - at the moment it just states a few statistics. b) the history section should be in prose, as opposed to a timeline. c) Could the "A Year in Rowing" sections be expanded somewhat? d) the Rowing Conference tables are very large - it might be an idea to give them their own seperate articles, and place a summary of them in this article, per Wikipedia:Summary style. d) the National Championships section could also do with a bit of expansion. e) the sources section should be titled "references", and cited properly (which isn't my forte, so I'm probably not the best person to ask). I hope I'm not too harsh - it's better to get these things early, and with a bit of work, it would make a good featured article. Ambi 03:38, 27 Nov 2004 (UTC)
These are all good suggestions, and I will start work on them as soon as classes end this friday.

Our Gang/The Little Rascals

...I did a lot of cleanup and fix ups on this one. The only things I think I need to do are to create stubs for June Marlowe, Scotty Beckett, and Eugene "Porky" Lee. I've also created a Category for articles about Our Gang kids. How does it all look? --b. Touch 23:31, 25 Nov 2004 (UTC)

  • Anyone? --b. Touch 03:33, 5 Dec 2004 (UTC)

Sonoluminescence

I see a lot of nonsense in this article. For instance the mechanism of SBSL is largely solved I think, and does not involve the rediculous hypothesis of hawking radiation in any way. Physicists versed in sonoluminescence should review this article.--Deglr6328 22:22, 24 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Salt Lake City, Utah

There are about 4 people who regularly contribute to this article, mostly locals. I believe this is a very comprehensive article for a city of its size and it would be great to have an outside point of view to make sure we aren't leaving anything out/assuming certain knowledge. Also, a review of its companion history article, History of Salt Lake City, would be great. Thanks. Jon, Conqueror of Men | (Talk!) 20:46, 24 Nov 2004 (UTC)

  • I'd very nearly support this for featured status as is, but I've still got a few suggestions first. a) Would it be possible to move the top picture into the infobox? b) The culture, media and economy sections are very short, and need expanding. I'm not sure about Recreation and Sports - I'd like to see that section a bit longer, but the article is already quite long. c) The education section could perhaps be moved to its own article and summarised to keep the article size down, and the universities list could perhaps be in prose rather than list form. d) Would it be possible to rewrite the opening of the geography section and the demographics section in such a way that doesn't make it instantly obvious the material came from Rambot? These are all comparatively minor quibbles, though - this is one fine article. Ambi 03:45, 27 Nov 2004 (UTC)
    • I agree... the capital picture is very nice, but the infobox and the thumbnail subtracts from the layout of the article. --AllyUnion (talk) 07:22, 27 Nov 2004 (UTC)
  • I've never lived in Salt Lake City, but growing up in southern Idaho, I've been there quite a bit, and the article describes a decent amount of what the city is like. It doesn't mention the music scene at all, which is a lot larger than you'd expect from a city its size. The picture of the bus overlaps some text, and needs to be moved down. I would like to hear more about how many churches are in the area, and a break-down of the denominations. Maybe more about the Mormon churches involvement in local politics, and what influence the LDS church has over Temple Square, and what impact it has. Celebes 04:36, 28 Nov 2004 (UTC)


Cissy Patterson

Would appreciate another set of eyes running over this, particularly those familiar with Washington, D.C., journalism, the Washington Post, and the like. Ave atque vale! PedanticallySpeaking 19:42, Nov 22, 2004 (UTC)

Racialism

I am currently taking a break from contributing to articles, so I cannot attend to this myself. The article is undergoing very questionable revisions by Sam Spade. Some selected versions from the article's revision history to consider:

I, also, am the one who contributed every-single reference, which I now very much regret as it lends credibility to Sam Spade's very questionable revisions and deletionism. Should 'racialism' involve the current Racial Sepratist movement to such an extent, is perhaps a key question El_C

I would like to note that I do not find the current three participants in the article to be sufficiently qualified and/or impartial for the task. I strongly encourage Peer Review from those participants yet to be involved in editing the article recently, especially those with some preliminary (or better yet, beyond) background with the subject. Thanks. El_C

I would like to note that I personally have found El_C incapable of neutrality and factual accuracy in relation to matters of racist and communist POV. I welcome any outside involvement which emphasises NPOV, and would point out that since El_C's departure, the article has become stable and the neutrality dispute removed (not added nor removed by myself). While editing the page he was consistantly counter-consensus, and his departure appears to have achieved consensus. 'Nuff said. Sam Spade

I would question the POV ability of anyone who uses the phrase "I personally"... --62.252.192.6 22:47, 5 Dec 2004 (UTC)
While, I appreciate the support, Anon., please do not use proxies to convey your thoughts on this as it detracts from the credibility (sock puppet-wise) of our non-Racialist apologist, NPOV position. El_C
Consensus among three people whom, I believe, lack sufficient familiarity with the term beyond its use in the Racial Separatist movement. I would also like to reiterate that I find Sam's tactics to be highly questionable. El_C

John Holmes, Albion K. Parris, John Chandler, Peleg Sprague

Suggestions? These articles are all on late 18th century/early 19th century American politicians of Maine and have been edited only by me (they're somewhat obscure, I guess). I'd like some outside thoughts. Neutrality (hopefully!) 05:13, Nov 22, 2004 (UTC)

punk rock

At the moment this article reads like a Clash tribute. It needs to stick to the subject and be more balanced. Some of the overt Clash references need removing and other groups should be better represented. There is more opinion than information here. For example:"Even their early "White Riot" had more political focus than any of the Pistols' songs, and "London's Burning" was angry but at the same time downright analytical". This is clearly straying from the theme of the topic which is an overview of Punk rock and at the same time is not even unbiased enough for an accurate article on The Clash themselves. Where is the NPOV? Please take a serious look at this article.

I've moved most of the Clash material to the Clash entry... you may still find some POV issues there. I also cut out quite a bit of tangential, POV and repetitive material. Take a look. --BTfromLA 03:28, 4 Dec 2004 (UTC)

Certainly an improvement. Well done. Possibly still needs some work ,but nothing too major.

No soap radio

Article written essentially by just me and DG, needs someone else's additions and expansion. Andre (talk) 06:19, Nov 21, 2004 (UTC)

Cremaster muscle

This is currently a brute-force merge of two different stubs. Someone with knowledge of the subject needs to review and finish merging the two. -- Karada 20:33, 20 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Force Dynamics

Me not English native speaker, check language please.

Seriously, the text should be thoroughly reviewed to pull out any EAL-related problems. Please pay special attention to the sample sentences. — mark ✎ 19:11, 20 Nov 2004 (UTC)

WikiReader Cryptography × 73

Hope this request isn't too much! We need review of around 73 articles. This box cycles through one a day. The WikiReader is aimed at a layperson, so most of the articles should have large sections which are easily reviewable by non-experts. — Matt 00:13, 20 Nov 2004 (UTC)
 
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Tuesday, 07 December Public-key cryptography (Talk) (History)
                   
Wednesday, 08 December History of cryptography (Talk) (History)
                   
Thursday, 09 December Zimmermann Telegram (Talk) (History)
                   
Friday, 10 December Cryptanalysis (Talk) (History)
                   
Saturday, 11 December MD5 (Talk) (History)
                   
Notes: If you find problems that you can't fix (or it's too much effort), it would be very helpful if you could place a note on the Talk: page. Articles need to be checked for 1) Accuracy (Factchecking: Are there any mistakes? Is the writing precise? Are sources cited?), 2) Completeness (Any obvious omissions? Does it need illustration?) 3) Quality of writing (Copyedits: Grammar and spelling, phrasing, structure) 4) Neutrality (Is it written from the NPOV? Do we document all relevant points of view?) — Thanks!
 

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3D Monster Maze

I've spilled all I could in there, and would appreciate everyone's input before mentally marking it for myself as finished. BACbKA 20:28, 19 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Middletown and Cincinnati Railroad

I'm not a very knowledgable a train buff, so I would appreciate someone who is checking over this article on what became part of the Pennsy. PedanticallySpeaking 17:25, Nov 19, 2004 (UTC)

Cocteau Twins

The websites listed in the article have tons of band/members photos and album covers, but I'm afraid to use any since they're never credited, and I don't know anything about copyrights. It really pains me since other than that the article looks very nice. I'd really appreciate if someone with more experience in the field could help with the images :) -- Jashiin 18:06, 17 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Noel Gallagher

It has been criticisded (a criticism which I full accept) that it is too POV. If someone could take the time to tone it down a bit (without changing the context too much or making the man look like a tosser), I would be very grateful.--Crestville 16:30, 17 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Baculum

Needs expert input. Very little info on the web. -- The Anome 19:21, Nov 16, 2004 (UTC)

Frequency analysis

A simple method of codebreaking. The plan is to include the article in a WikiReader on Cryptography. I'd appreciate any adding comments / fixes etc. Thanks! — Matt 19:00, 16 Nov 2004 (UTC)

HTLV

This is the result of merging by a non-expert. This, and its related articles, need a thorough review by someone who knows the field: also, something needs to be written about HTLV-2: there seems to be an assumption in various articles that HTLV == HTLV-1.

Body piercing materials

Some edits might have to be done, mainly language issues. I am not a native english speaker so there may be an abundance of errors in the text. The factual bit is pretty well covered I think. --Bong 00:00, 16 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Oscar Wilde

Was last week's Literature collaboration of the week. Filiocht 13:03, Nov 15, 2004 (UTC)

Alexander Hamilton

This article got a bollocking by Robert McHenry, Former Editor in Chief, the Encyclopædia Britannica in his article The Faith based encyclopedia (how do you like that, atheists! *grin*). Someone knowledgable want to go through it with a fine tooth-comb and show him just how good the article can get? Needs a bit of cleanup apparently. - Ta bu shi da yu 12:28, 15 Nov 2004 (UTC)

I added explicitly that page as a reference for the birthdate. I also added a note on the talk page requesting someone either get further references to fact check the article or use what is listed there already if they have it. It will be some time before I can personally get to the library and get a good book on it, so I'm hoping someone can do it sooner. - Taxman 14:23, Nov 15, 2004 (UTC)

Childhood amnesia

I expanded this article a bit but it has not been touched since. I definitely think it could use another editor looking it over for copyedits, formulations, facts and perhaps clarifications/expansion. Thanks. ✏ Sverdrup 01:32, 15 Nov 2004 (UTC)

  • Copyedits for clarity, precis. Katefan0 03:58, Nov 15, 2004 (UTC)

Deck (ship)

This has been a refactor and expansion, and may have become more technical than necessary. There is much use of jargon, some of which is defined. Help is requested on the use of jargon, specifically, and everything else generally. - Amgine 00:34, 13 Nov 2004 (UTC)

It looks good to me; I may add a section discussing flight decks since I have some additional expertise in that area but overall I think it is very credible and the use of jargon is no more than necessary to express things completely. --Ray Trygstad 17:46, 24 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Jesusland Map

A tricky article. I hope I've done justice to the somewhat controversial topic. I'd appreciate any helpful opinions or edits. - Scooter 21:53, 12 Nov 2004 (UTC)

The Supremes

I just finished giving this page a major overhaul. What else can be done to make is better? --b. Touch 20:54, 12 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Actually, it looks damn good to me... - Scooter 04:45, 14 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Democratic peace theory

I've done a lot of work on this article and I'd like some suggestions. Anyone? Neutrality (hopefully!) 14:45, Nov 12, 2004 (UTC)

  • The article looks good. However the Falklands War is not an example of two democracies going to war against each other as Argentina was under Military Junta at the time. Also I notice no mention of Dean Babst (mentioned on the talk page as someone pre-dating Rummel for positing the idea), you may of course have looked into this and discounted it. If this is the case, perhaps a reply stating this on the talk page may clarify things. CheekyMonkey 12:26, 14 Nov 2004 (UTC)
    • The BBC has this recent article [1] with some interesting points and some examples of democracies that have fought each other. CheekyMonkey 23:37, 17 Nov 2004 (UTC)
    • Hi guys, I am a political science grad student and I made several additions to the article. let me know what you think. --Evangelos 13:05, 30 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Flounder

This article has a lot of potential, but it's not quite encyclopaedic enough and I have no idea how to go about changing it. It needs a table, more direct facts, (e.g. we need to know average widths) more factual prose, and less cooking instructions, but I'm just a newcomer, so I need help. Vhex Hvexscousin 18:05, 11 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Yes it could use a classification table such as is used in the other fish articles. (E.g. Tuna.) I'm not so sure about the descriptive statements; they seem to personalized. (E.g. 'grotesque change', 'exceptionally odd-looking', or 'luckily'. I actually think the Flounder is a rather interesting-looking creature, rather than grotesque.) You could probably use words like asymmetrical or abnormal, for example. But that's just my opinion, of course. -- RJH 18:15, 16 Nov 2004 (UTC)
It wouldn't be correct to describe the flounder as "abnormal." In fact such asymmetry appears to be typical for bony flatfish. Examples include flounder, sole, halibut, turbot, plaice, and sanddab. Dozens more such species exist. It is extremely likely that the asymmetry contributes to their survival since it helps to disguise them on the ocean floor.--Johnstone 15:21, 23 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Maybe this page should go to pages needing attention? -- AllyUnion (talk) 08:20, 1 Dec 2004 (UTC)

John F. Kennedy assassination

This article is a lengthy mess. It appears that in the past no consensus was formed but instead each side of the debate merely dumped its material into the article. It could use some dedicated editors to assist in forging consensus, eliminating some of the material, and disproving some of the wilder assertions presented as fact. Gamaliel 01:16, 11 Nov 2004 (UTC)

I'll have a go at refactoring it into a main article with a number of subpages. Expect to see something drop in soon. jguk 08:36, 15 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Standard of proof

Tried to expand this into a more general discussion of what we mean by the standard of proof. Not really sure if its an acceptable direction to take the post in. Perhaps someone could leave feedback, I'm pretty new to this. (Posted by 129.67.64.248 19:06, November 10, 2004)

  • Hi, sorry, but it's too much of an essay towards the end. It's a good start on a needed topic, but it needs to have an encyclopedic coverage of the topic. Think who what why when where and address the issue from all ways and all subjects it applies to as much as you can. I also put some helpful links on the user page for your IP address, User talk:129.67.64.248. Keep up the contributions, you'll get there. - Taxman 00:36, Nov 11, 2004 (UTC)

Gbe languages

I think it would be good if someone else would go through this article - I suspect I might be overlooking things just because I've been working on it so much. Thanks in advance for the critique and suggested improvements! — mark ✎ 23:25, 9 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Alfa Romeo

A lot of ready-made ideas IMO. And you know what ? I'm of Lombard's origins. Ericd 22:36, 9 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Pet Sematary

Hi everybody, I was wondering if someone would comment on this article — say whether it needs expansion, if it's too long-winded, if the grammar needs to be corrected, and so on. Also, I'm thinking about adding a picture of the cover. Leroi henri christophe 13:21, 9 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Lesch-Nyhan syndrome

hey there i just finished this article and i'd like some comments or ideas for improvement, oh and also i need an image, any image that would be suitable so i can get it to feature status. --Larsie 17:14, 8 Nov 2004 (UTC)

It does need some overall copyediting, and many terms need simpler in line explantions. Also carefully consider many of the redlinks and see if they either already have their own article named something else, or if they really are notable enough to have their own article. The genetics section needs a clearer explanation of why it only effects males. The fact that women have two X chromosomes would not necessarily entirely preclude the disease from occuring in women, I believe a problem in one of the X chromosomes can cause some genetic diseases. Why does it not in this case? I was trying to think of a way to fix it but the entire paragraph needs to be re-ordered to fix that and make it clearer. Check the featured article criteria, the article needs explicit references. - Taxman 17:22, Nov 8, 2004 (UTC)
  • Just breaking it up into briefer paragraphs would be a start. Very long paragraphs tend to "exhaust" the reader and they quickly lose interest. -- RJH 23:09, 8 Nov 2004 (UTC)
  • ok so i got rid of most of the red and will porbably write article to get rid of the rest, iadded more references and also re-formatted the paragraphs and headings/subheadings etc. how does it look now??? --Larsie 23:15, 9 Nov 2004 (UTC)
I think it is a bit too full of jargon. Who is your audience? Osmodiar 15:51, 23 Nov 2004 (UTC)


Grief

Why is it marked as for cleanup, when it is not registered on Wiki:Cleanup?

Probably because it got archived off the Wikipedia:Cleanup main page, but still has the {{Cleanup}} tag at the top of the page. I think it needs more wikifying adn general copyediting, so you can remove the tag if you like and just leave it listed here. By the way, how does [[Wiki:Cleanup]] link to an external site? - Taxman 18:15, Nov 8, 2004 (UTC)

List of molecules in interstellar space

This list is all but done, but I'd appreciate it if somebody more knowledgeable about chemistry could check the molecular designations for accuracy. Thank you. — RJH 19:49, 6 Nov 2004 (UTC)

I think it would be nice to have some background information in this article. Where does the information come from? What institutions or space agencies do collect this sort of information, and how exactly? Mark Dingemanse (talk) 09:20, 13 Nov 2004 (UTC)
Okay I added an external link to an NRAO reference site, and included a brief description at the top with links to other articles with more information. Thanks. -- RJH 17:01, 16 Nov 2004 (UTC)



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